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« Reply #20 on: September 15, 2018, 08:52:20 AM »


I love a lot of Squeeze's quirky lyrics, and a lot of them fall into the "creative rhyming " category. This is one of the worst (or best) , but certainly in the spirit of this thread. From Labelled with Love:

A moth eaten object she'd say that she'd sod all,
Her friends who had left her to drink from her bottle....

Hmmmm



From the same song
"He like a cowboy died drunk in a slumber
Out on the porch in the middle of summer
She crossed the ocean back home to her family
But they had retired to roads that were sandy".
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« Reply #21 on: September 15, 2018, 09:33:46 AM »

Many of these 'rhymes' read as though they had been poorly translated from a foreign language  Angry
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« Reply #22 on: September 15, 2018, 10:37:55 AM »


"I smoked my first cigarette at ten
And for girls, I had a bad yen."

From When I Was Young by Eric Burdon & The Animals.  I love the record, but that's a stinker of a rhyme.

Jules


See also San Franciscan Nights.
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« Reply #23 on: September 15, 2018, 02:48:52 PM »

"I've got my saddle
On my horse.
He's called... T-t-t-t-t-trigger
Of course."

"My name is Ted,
And one day I'll be dead yo, yo."
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« Reply #24 on: September 19, 2018, 09:15:19 PM »

Not very rock ‘n’ roll, but anyone out there who has taught primary within the last thirty years will have cringed at this one on an annual basis:

Autumn days when the grass is jewelled
And the silk inside a chestnut shell.
Jet planes meeting in the air to be re-fuelled
All these things I know so well.

How many people have sat in assembly thinking “wtf......? “
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« Reply #25 on: September 20, 2018, 08:39:25 PM »

Just look at the first 2 lines of virtually every verse from my favourite XTC song “The Mayor of Simpleton”

For example...
Well I don’t know how to write a big hit song
And all crossword puzzles well I just shun
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« Reply #26 on: September 21, 2018, 10:18:05 AM »


Not very rock ‘n’ roll, but anyone out there who has taught primary within the last thirty years will have cringed at this one on an annual basis:

Autumn days when the grass is jewelled
And the silk inside a chestnut shell.
Jet planes meeting in the air to be re-fuelled
All these things I know so well.

How many people have sat in assembly thinking “wtf......? “


https://www.independent.co.uk/news/uk/home-news/composer-who-drove-choir-to-rebel-defends-her-plane-song-1358136.html
this is an interesting article about that very hymn
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« Reply #27 on: September 21, 2018, 12:44:47 PM »

Recently been listening to It Makes No Difference by The Band. For me, one of THE great heartbreak songs apart from the rather clunky lyrics in the bridge:

Since you've gone it's a losing battle
Stampeding cattle, they rattle the walls

Its probably a metaphor for erm, something, but it really jars with me. Rick Danko's delivery is superb though, especially on the Last Waltz version.

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« Reply #28 on: September 22, 2018, 03:27:29 AM »



"I wish that I could fly into the sky
So very high
Just like a dragonfly"

Getaway by Lenny Kravitz


Impossible to read that in any voice other than Orville's   Shocked
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« Reply #29 on: September 24, 2018, 11:09:42 AM »




"I wish that I could fly into the sky
So very high
Just like a dragonfly"

Getaway by Lenny Kravitz


Impossible to read that in any voice other than Orville's   Shocked


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« Reply #30 on: September 24, 2018, 12:15:08 PM »




"I wish that I could fly into the sky
So very high
Just like a dragonfly"

Getaway by Lenny Kravitz


Impossible to read that in any voice other than Orville's   Shocked
But I can't!
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« Reply #31 on: September 24, 2018, 06:40:44 PM »





"I wish that I could fly into the sky
So very high
Just like a dragonfly"

Getaway by Lenny Kravitz


Impossible to read that in any voice other than Orville's   Shocked
But I can't!


You can!
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« Reply #32 on: September 24, 2018, 11:09:29 PM »






"I wish that I could fly into the sky
So very high
Just like a dragonfly"

Getaway by Lenny Kravitz


Impossible to read that in any voice other than Orville's   Shocked
But I can't!


You can!
I can't!!!
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« Reply #33 on: October 02, 2018, 08:12:06 PM »

I suppose I could collect my books and get on back to school
Or steal my daddy's cue and make a living out of playing pool


Shoehorned, or what?
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« Reply #34 on: October 02, 2018, 09:46:57 PM »


I suppose I could collect my books and get on back to school
Or steal my daddy's cue and make a living out of playing pool


Shoehorned, or what?


I think it's fine.

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« Reply #35 on: October 02, 2018, 09:53:42 PM »



I suppose I could collect my books and get on back to school
Or steal my daddy's cue and make a living out of playing pool


Shoehorned, or what?


I think it's fine.

Jules



Well, it does rhyme, but the sentence seems a bit random which is why I think it is shoehorned.  Smiley
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« Reply #36 on: October 02, 2018, 10:25:54 PM »

"From 9 to 5 I have to spend my time at work......"
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« Reply #37 on: October 02, 2018, 10:29:25 PM »


"From 9 to 5 I have to spend my time at work......"


My job is very boring I’m an office clerk! Good one, Yabb!
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« Reply #38 on: October 02, 2018, 10:59:23 PM »

"She's a model and she's looking good
I'd like to take her home, that's understood"
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« Reply #39 on: October 02, 2018, 11:06:50 PM »

‘I got you in the camera and
I got you in my camera
A second of your life ruined for life
You want to ruin me in your magazine
You want to cover us in the margarine
And now is the time to realize
To have real eyes’

I am wavering between the brilliant rhymes and awful rhymes with this one. Jules? Anyone?
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